http://saciel.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] saciel.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] culuyetille 2005-05-02 03:25 pm (UTC)

Guess you need a beta-reader... don't ask me, I'm no native english speaker, but I found some things which can't be right.

The story itself is fine, maybe took in the last part too much breath... but okay. *happy* I loved Hwo's reactions

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