http://saciel.livejournal.com/ (
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2005-05-02 03:25 pm (UTC)
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Guess you need a beta-reader... don't ask me, I'm no native english speaker, but I found some things which can't be right.
The story itself is fine, maybe took in the last part too much breath... but okay. *happy* I loved Hwo's reactions
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The story itself is fine, maybe took in the last part too much breath... but okay. *happy* I loved Hwo's reactions